Monday, November 30, 2009

Horror Land

It was screaming and shouting in the night Amusement Park at night, their where a line to the death defining ride of your life. How is to me, it was cold and the line keep getting closer to the ticket taker, you can't ever won't to go here, so I give the ticket to the creepy old Lady and got on the ride. The ride was tuning and swirling in the air, it give you the chill then everything went black, and a million worm went down from the sky, with the only thing of all is that the blood of death, of the mountain road and some flying down with big white teeth! To scary for a kid next me and she scream that it almost blow my ear off, It made me never to go to horror land ever again. Then the ride had stop on some place that I never seen before, I take a look around with my eye sitting on my seat, then the ride took of with a fast speed to the mane gate, and I get of the seat and ran out the gate, and when I got out of the gate and it close shut!

2 comments:

Marylou said...

Dear Duc,

I love the way that you wrote your beginning. It is real strong. I hope that you write another great story on your blog. Because I really like this one. Do you like scary stories? Or do you like other genres? If you don't know what genre means it is another word for a kind of book.

-Marylou

James said...

good punctuation, I like how you described how the ride went. Maybe next time you could make sure that every thing makes sense.

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